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Tom Said,
May 30th, 2014 @10:49 am  

This appears to be thesis statement: This(tenure) has proved to be a growing issue that is harming school’s finances and academics.

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Robert Said,
May 30th, 2014 @11:14 am  

This also used to be a problem of mine at the beginning of high school. A thesis is a statement that declares what the rest of your essay will be about. Normally I would place a thesis statement at the end of the introductory paragraph. Sometimes it will sound repetitive, especially at the beginning of your second paragraph, but this is the way most teachers like it.

So in your case I am assuming that your main points are: newer teachers are more likely to get laid off, bad tenured teachers are almost immune to being fired, and the costs associated with tenured teachers. If these are your points then a sample thesis statement would be something like: “Why is teacher tenure the reason for our failing schools? (because newer teachers are more likely to get laid off, bad tenured teachers are almost immune to being fired, and the negative costs associated with tenured teachers hurts a school’s finances.)”

So your thesis is what comes after the question you posed (but make it so it doesn’t start with “because”)
and normally you restate your thesis in your conclusion, which I see you have already done here: “newer teachers are more likely to get laid off, bad tenured teachers are almost immune to being fired, and the costs associated with tenured teachers.”

I know that sometimes it may sound odd (it used to for me), but it is just to give an overview about the contents of your essay.
Good luck with everything!
-Robert

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